was gone long, long ago. But I have finally come to understand how it pained my mother to beat me for my obstinacy and disobedience, and I ache at her pain.
     Mother never gave up evoking in me an interest in knowledge. She placed the most emphasis on my education and took the most pleasure in my gradual formation of self-discipline in preparing myself for future development. Thanks to her effort and influence, I have been doing well, not only in English, but also in my positive attitudes and conviction towards life.
     Now I am so grateful to my mother for everything she has taught me, but at that time it was far beyond my comprehension. As a little girl, I thought of my mother as meticulous and my father as a best playmate. I still remember I wrote in my elementary school a composition dedicated to my father about how he cared for me.  Naturally Mother felt she was ignored, so I wrote another one for Mother, intending to tell her she was so good a teacher that she sometimes had only students on mind and neglected her daughter. Unexpectedly, Mother was gloomed and her eyes went wet. I am so sorry now for that affected composition. I am Mother's daughter, and I am Mother's student.  I could never be neglected by Mother, because I am the forever scar on her body, the forever pain on her mind, yet the forever bliss in her life.
     I did not write much in the past about Mother's love for me. Today, this essay is for her, and for her only. I wish to let her know my regret and gratitude. I wish she could hear, "I love you, Mother."

简  评
    古往今来，人们都说，母爱是世界上最伟大的爱。作者通过回忆历历往事，用她深情的笔调，为我们谱写了又一首歌颂母亲的赞歌，刻画了一位平凡而伟大的母亲的生动形象，让我们又一次领略到母亲无私奉献的崇高精神。
    该散文文笔优美，语言纯正，声情并茂，感人肺腑，愿天下所有的儿女都能像作者一样真正感受到舐犊情深，并回报这份浓厚、纯洁的母爱。
    当然，本文在事例具体、内容充实方面还有进一步改进的余地。母亲的形象也似乎略欠丰满。
    (点评教师：时丽娜)

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