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英语大赛获奖作文范文

时间:2012-6-30栏目:高中英语作文

英语大赛获奖作文范文

本期点评专家:

 赵秀凤,中国石油大学外国语学院教授、博士,全国英语创新大赛顾问委员会副主任,第十届、第十—届全国创新英语大赛评委。

 参赛佳作

 姓名:张雅婷

 学校:淄博市实验中学

 成绩:96

 A letter to my Mom

 Dear Mom,

 I´m writing this letter, filled with guilt andanxiety. But I still have to tell you: I´ve run awayfrom home with my boyfriend-Tony. In fact, weclicked straightaway at first sight. Ilove the tattooon his body which has a variety of pattems. Ofcourse, he has a few girlfriends and we fell outa cmlple oftimes about tbis. Things are gettingbetter these days, because I was pregnant andhe swore that he would be loyal to me only sincethen.

 By the way, Tony is slightly older than me(48-year-old man , not too old in the present so-ciety, righf?). However, we have no money atpresent, so we intend to move to a desert islandand build a cosy cabin in wbich we can leadour own jolly life for the rest of our lives. Afterwe have gotten used to our new life, we plan togrow marijuana to earn money for bis AIDS treat-ment. I pray he can get well soon, Amen!

 I hope youjust haven´t fainted till now,Mom. Then you can turn the letter over.

 Wbat you have just read is not tnie. Pleaseforgive me for using such an absurd way to let youImow there are many things in the world which arefar worse than I get grade L111 less than A or at-tending a sleep over. I´m still in the bloom of yo-uth and I´m full of energy .I bave passion for dan-cing, sports, etc. I´ve yeamed for choosing myown extracurricular activities for long. However,I can hardly breathe under your tough restriction.And it doesn´t make sense to even forbid mebeing in a school play. An excellent girl do-esn´t just mean good grades. In addition tothis , success is not always about control, it´salso about letting go. Leave me more freespace and I´ll do better, I promise.

 Yours truly,

 Your daughter

 May 31th, 2011

专家点评;

 这封信开头,作者给妈妈开了一个玩笑,说了一个荒谬而又有趣的故事,吸引读者眼球,激发读者兴趣。借这个故事,作者表示自己是个乖巧的女儿,但是渴望能抛开束缚、获得自由,从而表达了自己对“虎妈”式教育的看法。文章结构新颖,富有创意;思路清晰,语句灵活,说服力强。不足之处是个别语句之间的逻辑不够清晰,存在连接词缺失、使用不当的现象。

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